MAKE YOUR OWN STORY


Dear Students of Class VI

Please click on Let’s Make Our Own Story to read fresh updates on this post from 22/01/2014 onwards.

Like you, I too, like reading or listening to stories. It could also be interesting to make your own story for someone else to read, for a change.

Today, we discussed four of the Seven Aspects of a Story:

  1. Author/Narrator (that’s you, and you are actually outside the story)
  2. Plot (Beginning, Complication and Ending)
  3. Characters (Hero, Villain and others)
  4. Setting (Location or scene where the story unfolds)
  5. Theme (What the story is about / Central Idea)
  6. ??? (Guess what is left out!) 
  7. ??? (Guess what else is left out!)

Today, you also tried your hand at writing the outline of a plot. Interesting but not very easy.  Famous authors have to work long and hard to think of a good plot. Only then will other people like to read the story.

Those who are interested can take part in this Contest. Click on Create A Character for details.

Home Task: Click on and read this STORY from the Panchatantra. We will work on this story in our next session.

POST UPDATE ON 7/1/14

Well done Class VI! You identified characters (hero & villain) and setting correctly. Now, if you read my post today, I want you to leave a Comment giving the Plot Outline (Beginning, Middle, Ending) of this story.

Here is today’s Character Web woven by the Class VI Story Spiders. Thank you Ms. Moollan for this photo

photoTo help you with my terrible scrawl, the separate threads of your character web are given below:

  • Mohan
  • 15 year old boy in 200 BCE
  • living in the empire of Asoka the Great
  • fairly tall (5 feet 3 inches)
  • dark
  • thin
  • moon face
  • tousled, curly brown hair
  • sparkling white teeth (always a grin on his face)
  • a budding moustache 
  • mischievous and full of pranks
  • lame
  • very clever
  • father died when he was a baby
  • an only child
  • poor
  • works in a stable
  • loves horse riding
  • loves the horse Raftar (a thoroughbred Arab stallion?)

Wonderful job, Story Spiders – your magic Character Web is bringing Mohan alive before my eyes as if he was living here and now and not far back in history. I was tempted to add a few more details – but that would be unfair – without my Story Spiders.

Tomorrow, or when we meet next, we must work on the PLOT of Mohan’s story and further embellish (add to) his character. Agreed?

UPDATE ON 8/1/14

I will most probably not be meeting you today, but I do expect that those students who have not yet shared their character should create him or her and send me today. I will be waiting eagerly, so please do not disappoint me. Those who have already got their hero/heroine on stage, now begin to think of a Villain. Next when we meet, we will have lots to do:

1) Select the Winner of the Hero Competition (very difficult – postponed!)

2) Discuss the theme of the Lion story (done)

3) spin a character web for the villain in Mohan’s story (done)

and at home, you will plan out the villain for your own story (a few done, still waiting for others)

I hope you are as excited and eager as I am to get on with all this. It will be even more fun, because Ms. Dantalia will join us.

See you soon, my Story Spiders!

UPDATE ON 12/1/14

You correctly identified the meaning of Theme in a story, which is excellent. If you scroll up, you will see that I have added your description to our list above. The central idea of the plot, or the reason why the story is written, is its theme. For instance, in the Panchatantra story of the Lion’s Bad Breath, the Theme is: A diplomatic reply is better than an outright truth or lie when you are dealing with ruthless tyrants. 

Yes, in a short fable, the moral and the theme are often the same.

Did you see 2 more questions on the list of Seven Aspects of a Story?

Guess what we left out of the list! 

I am also waiting to see what you score on the character rating by your friends. While there can be only One winner, the individual score of Every contestant is important. It shows how good the Reader thinks you are. 

 While you Story Spiders create the villain of your own , let me outline the villain in Mohan’s Story as created by you yesterday. Look at Ms. Moollan’s excellent photo of the character web spun by all of you and drawn by Sachi :

photo

Here is our Villain:

  • Ghalin
  • My addition – a foreigner of unknown origin (of unknown country or parentage)
  • Rich
  • In his forties
  • Tall
  • Grey haired
  • Fair skinned
  • Scarred body (old sword and knife wounds)
  • One blind eye
  • Hypnotic eye (the remaining one)
  • Proud of curling mustachios
  • Yellowish teeth with one gold tooth
  • Wears black clothes only
  • Wears hollow diamond rings with poison inside on every finger
  • A killer (murderer of Mohan’s father)
  • Jealous of everyone
  • Hates the poor
  • Quarrelsome
  • Has an armoury of swords and knives
  • Keeps a secret key hidden in his turban
  • Scared of ghosts

Add Dev’s comment that Ghalin has still kept hidden away the evidence of Mohan’s father’s death (too dangerous to dispose of?).

I think you have done very well indeed. I greatly admire the villain for his characteristic wickedness. Don’t worry, I don’t like him. If the readers like Ghalin, then he won’t remain a villain anymore!

Do you see how Mohan and Ghalin together have us all eager to read their story? This is because in spinning the hero and villain, we have added hints of the plot (what may happen). We know, for instance, that there was a murder in the past, of Mohan’s father by Ghalin, when Mohan was a baby. Can you spot any more? So now, let us spin the rest of the plot. There are many choices before us as we decide:

  • How the complication (problem) begins
  • What happens when the problem reaches its climax
  • How the problem is resolved in the end

I think, I will begin with the Theme. Why am I writing this story? What is the serious central idea I’m trying to depict? I have the following choices (keeping it simple):

  • Evil is always exposed and punished
  • Intelligence is more powerful than wealth

These two themes can be combined in the same story. One more that matches these two is:

  • Jealousy and anger convert men into villains

Now, let us begin the plot and check out out our choices:

Background: Mohan lives with his mother, poor but content. His father was killed by Ghalin (why?). His mother has/hasn’t (which?) told Mohan about how his father died.

Complication: Their ancient enemy, Ghalin, is about to re-enter Mohan’s life (how?).

We will discuss these when we next meet in class.

Check out New Contest on the link given below.

UPDATE ON 22/01/2013

Please click on Let’s Make Our Own Story to read fresh updates on this post from 22/01/2014 onwards.

Principal

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95 responses to “MAKE YOUR OWN STORY

  1. MA’AM MY HERO IS:-
    NAME-ANNA
    20 YEARS OLD
    SHE HAS BLACK AND LONG HAIR
    SHE IS 5.5 FEET TALL
    HER SKIN COLOUR IS BROWNISH
    SHE HELPS THE POLICE
    SHE HAS BRIGHT TEETH
    SHE HAS MANY GUNS HIDDEN ON HER BODY (EXAMPLE-INSIDE HER SHOES)
    ANNA ALWAYS LOVES TO DEFEAT STRONG PEOPLE
    FOND OF SWORDS
    SHE HAS KNOWLEDGE ABOUT POISONOUS PLANTS
    DRIVING CARS IS HER PASSION

    AND MA’AM MY VILLAIN IS :-
    NAME-MARAUDER
    HE LIVES ON THE PLANET NAMED HELLION PRIME
    HE TRAPS ANNA ON HELLION PRIME
    MARAUDER HAS A POWER OF BECOMING INVISIBLE
    HE ALSO HAS MANY TECHNOLOGICAL GUNS
    HE HAS VAMPIRE TEETH
    HE IS A 3 EYED PERSON
    HE HAS GREEN EYES
    FAIRLY TALL (6 FEET)
    HE HATES KILLERS AND STRONG PEOPLE
    HIS HAND IS A LASER GUN.
    MA’AM THESE ARE MY HERO AND VILLAIN

    THANKING

    YOURS SINCERELY
    EVA NATHANI

  2. Mam my villain s name is jaklin the judje. He was like this:-
    He was not kind
    Looked handsome and well dressed
    He is jelous of the people how were better then him
    Kept many pens in his upper pocket
    Always gave bad suggestion
    He was very much jelous of Vinod when he saw him dancing tried to make him lose
    He also was the part of the killing his mother

  3. Respected ma’am here is the description of my villain :
    Three and a half foot tall , rough&dry face and hand, dull grey colour skin ,black hair stroke lines with silver, thick black woollen dress covered in cat hair , muddy black pointed boots, crumple blue hat with yellow stars on it, black cat with very sharp yellow eye and flicks its tail in anti-clockwise.
    Sorry ma’am for submitting it late.

  4. Respected Mam,
    I would like to share my villain’s character:-
    My villain’s name is Vickram Singh Yadav. He is the father of Ken Singh Yadav (hero of the story). Vickram Singh Yadav is 45 years old and 6 feet tall. He is having a big mustache. He is having curly hair. When Vickram Singh Yadav was 2 years old his mother and father was dead in an accident. He was an orphan. When he was 5 years old he met with some bad people and made a group. After some years he became the leader of that group. His group name was ‘Chandrapur Ganges’ (as they lived in Chandrapur, U.P.). He started robbery when he was 12. He has a business of selling guns, very sharp knife and etc in which he earns 1,00,00,000 per month. He has done many murders also. He wears a gold bracelet in which he hides drug. He is a drug addict. His favorite work is discriminating poor people and his son Ken hates that. Therefore everyone in the city hates Vickram Singh Yadav.

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  6. Respected ma’am,
    I added some of the points in my story’s villain.
    His name is great demon.( by people).
    Fair complexion.
    Not an indian.
    Very powerful.
    Dishonest.
    Rude behaviour.
    Wears apron.
    A small knife hidden in his apron.
    Also wearing bullet proof jackets.
    Hated indian people.
    Was expert in making bombs.
    Quarrelsome.

  7. Ma’am here is the detailed description of my villian:
    Her name is Kiara. She is taller than average height (5 feet 9 inch). She, even though looks beautiful, has an evil mind. She is thin. Her favourite colour is black. She is jealous of good students. She has two assistants who fulfill her orders. She likes to rag the hostel students. She is certainly immortal till she doesn’t kill herself.

  8. Dear mam
    hear is my villain description:-
    Her name is KANIKA.
    She is a lady Dracula.
    She looks very nice.
    She hates sunlight.
    She is thin, long hairs.
    She has magic powers in her hair.
    She likes to kills and torture other people.
    She has also a team to work for her.
    She like to drinks the blood of people.
    She has a snake named YAKA.
    She have dirty Yellow teeth
    She comes at night and take humans to her house in jungle.

  9. Respected ma’am ,
    My villain is a fairy . She has magical powers in her magic wand .
    She always wears black  gown with black jewelleries . she is tall and has brown coloured curly hair . she is jealous of Santa because all children love him . She has one brother with whom she troubles Santa. He also wears black clothes and black jewelleries .
    Khushi shah

  10. Respected Ma’am,
    Her is my description of the villain:-

    Beneath her face lies a scheming brain always trying to plan something evil. Her voice is very devilish. Her name is Sarah and she is a thief. She is in her mid-teens and of average height. Her eye colour is ebony and she has tanned skin. She is quite slim. She has curly chestnut brown hair. She is often a troublemaker and she is domineering and irritates others many a times. She steals everything so slyly in order to avoid any one finding out. Sarah wears a black colour mask when she steals anything with her gang called ‘The Stealing Experts’ which she is the leader of.

    • The first sentence is intriguing. Yet, Sarah “steals anything” shows lack of selection. Could you think of a more stylish name for the gang? Now, link her up with your heroine and form your plot.

    • Ma’am ,
      My villain is a fairy . She has magical powers in her magic wand .
      She always wears black  gown with black jewelleries . she is tall and has brown coloured curly hair . she is jealous of Santa because all children love him . She has one brother with whom she troubles Santa. He also wears black clothes and black jewelleries .
      Khushi shah

  11. Ma’am my evilans name is zalro . Ma’am I have described some of its part in my hero’s part. He is 5 feet 2 inches tall and has a fair colour . He has a eye patch on his left eye . He wants to rule whole world by living in surat Thani , Thailand . He always be over confidence about his power . He has a case of being murderer of Optimus primes grandfather but he has hide all the evidence .

  12. RESPECTED MAM,
    I HAVE NOW WROTE THE DETAILS OF VILLAIN BELOW ;
    NAME-DAKOTAN
    AGE-52
    HEIGHT-219.4 CM
    SIN COLOR-BROWNISH
    BODY-SOME WHAT FAT
    FACE-MOON FACE
    HAIR-YELLOW
    TEETH-YELLOW
    MANNER-JEALOUSY WITH OTHERS
    PROBLEM-ONLY ONE KIDNEY (ANOTHER ONE DONATED TO THE FATHER)
    CLEVERNESS-FAIL
    DEATH IN THE FAMILY-VILLAIN’S MOTHER
    DAUGHTER AND SON IN FAMILY-ONE SON
    RICHNESS-VERY POOR
    FAVORITE ACTIVITY-KILLING OTHER HUMAN (KILLER)
    PET ANIMAL & NAME-SNAKE ‘CRISCO'(IT WAS POISONOUS & DAKOTAN USED IT TO KILL OTHERS)
    JEWELRY WORE-POINTED DIAMOND RINGS IN RITE HAND AND CONTAINS POISON TO KILL OTHERS
    SHOE’S STYLE-HAS POINTED THORNS DOWN THE SHOES
    MOUSTACHE-ROUND SHAPED
    PEOPLE UNDER HIM-HAS A GANG OF PEOPLE ON HIS PAY
    HABIT-ROILING MOUSTACHE
    THANK YOU MAM

  13. Mam here is my heroine character:-
    • LONG CURLY HAIR
    • YELLOW SHINING COLOR HAIR
    • LOW VOICE
    • CHUBBY CHEEKS
    • HEIGHT :- AVERAGE
    • AGE:- 19 YEARS
    • LITTLE NAUGHTY BUT WELL BEHAVED TOO
    • ALWAYS WEARING A BLUE BRACELET
    • FAIR
    • HEART SHAPED FACE
    • BLUE EYES
    • WHITE SHINING TEETH
    • PINK ROSY LIPS
    • HER NAME IS – Jacqueline

    By :- AQSA KAPADIA

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  15. MAM MY CHARACTER NAME IS ‘SARTHAK’
    AGE-12 year old
    HEIGHT-6 feet 1 inches
    SIN COLOR-yellowish
    BODY-thin
    FACE-cone shaped
    HAIR-black
    TEETH-shining white
    MANNER-naughty but hard working
    PROBLEM-right hand pointer finger was cut off (finger got stuck in the lift door & the lift
    was on)
    CLEVERNESS-less clever
    DEATH IN THE FAMILY-real daughter
    DAUGHTER AND SON IN FAMILY-2 sons(1daughter who died)
    RICHNESS-middle classed
    FAVORITE ACTIVITY-painting
    PET ANIMAL & NAME-dog ‘shame’

    • Dear Sanket, I am a little confused. 12 year old Sarthak has one brother? His sister died, how? Does he have a pointed chin (cone shaped face)? Why does he call his dog Shame? It’s sad he lost his finger so painfully. Yet he can paint. Then he must be very clever, not less. He must be sensitive too? Most artists are, you know.

  16. Respected Mam i want to give my character discription:
    • His name was Bheem.
    • He was 13 years old.
    • His height was 4.2 feet.
    • He loved running.
    • His color was whitish.
    • His hair style was formal.
    • He was naughty.
    • He was intelligent and talented.
    • His hair color was brownish.
    • His family was middle classed.
    • His father worked in king’s kingdom.
    • He was only child in his family.

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  19. Respected mam,
    I would like to describe my character hero ( male ) .
    Name is ARMAN ……..
    He is 13 years old .
    He is 5 feet tall .
    He would be having a plum face .
    He would always wear a shirt which”s collar up and a pant of brown color which is very loose to him.
    He would be wearing a goggles with dark plastic frame in it and a little long hair form which we can make a short pony
    His passion was to have all types of pens like :
    Parker , Reynolds pens and etc……..
    He would wear gum boots ……..
    By : Tanvi Luthra

  20. I read all the description of the characters, I am too waiting to read your stories…..Keep up the spirit learners… Great to see you are interested in stories too…

    • Thanks Mam and I am also waiting to read Dev’s story as it’s continuously struggling me that how can a man have 45kg wight if he is 2.5 feet long?

  21. Dear Students, here is Khushi’s Character as she emailed me. She has chosen a character whom all children love:
    :- About 4-5 feet tall
    :- Has a chubby face
    :- Is little bit healthy
    :- Has a big and a white moustache
    :- Has a fairly long white beard
    :- Has a kind nature
    :- Always wear red and white coloured clothes
    :- Always wears red coloured cap with a white coloured ball hanging on it
    :- Comes every Christmas with lots of gifts

    Khushi Shah
    Class-VI

  22. Respected ma’am
    My character is some how like these

    There was a boy in a village he was named dynamo in England .he was fair and some how 5-6 feet long. He was of 15 years. His father died because his father can’t return the loan. He was clever and in village he expert in playing chess. Dynamo was poor. One day he got a injured dog so he healed him with bandage and give him food and water so that faster he can fill his cut. He named the dog mike. He always treat people with respect whether he is poor or rich. He keep himself always neat and clean and always help whenever required. He has two friends James and Rod. One day he saw a child named Ali bulling the people around him so he said,”why you are bulling people”,then Ali said ,”if you can defeat me any indoor or outdoor sports then I will stop,”dynamo said defeat me in Chess”,then match started. After sometime the match was at last minute and dynamo won the match. From that day dynamo was greatly respected.

  23. Respected Ma’am
    Here is the description of my heroine (Female)which I imagined.
    Her age is around 14-15 years.she was fair and she looks beautiful.
    Her height was not too short nor too long.She was very intelligent.Her name was crysty.
    She is very talented but she is little shy.She has a problem that she cannot see from her one eye.But the help of one eye she can do everything. Sometime she has some problem but she never mind it and continue her work.In the class her friends tease her so when she come back home she tells her mother about the class.Her mother says that you should never mind it.I know that ,why they tease you but you can do everything like other children.I know that you have problem in your one eye but your another eye is perfect.Now whenever they tease you,you should ignore it.

    • Dear Siddhi, Actually, Cristy is more clever than two-eyed people. She can do everything with one eye, whereas most people need at least two eyes to manage, if not four (counting specs)

  24. Rajesh is a 19 years old boy, with a curly hair. He is 6 feet 3 inch long. He has a sharp pointed nose. He is little bit chubby. He loves to wear T-shirt and jeans. He wears Addidas shoes. He is from a rich family. He is only a son of his parents. His grandmother died when he was a baby. His father is an illiterate business man. His father is very cruel, rude to poor and selfish. But on other side Rajesh is an intelligent, smart, clever, brave, and handsome boy. He hates discrimination with poor people, which his father loves to do. Rajesh loves dog very much. He has a dog named Tommy. He loves to play with it. He is very good at sports and studies. Therefore, everyone loves him a lot.

    • Dear Saurashmi, Your Rajesh is the second one on this blog’s comments. I can see him coming into conflict with his father very soon and I am waiting to see how things turn out in your story. I think Rajesh is “tall” rather than “long”. Does everyone love him because he is an all rounder, or merely admire him for that? But if Rajesh is kind and helpful as well, then he is likely to have many friends who love him.

      • yes mam, everyone loves him as-well-as admire him. And there are many friends who loves him.

  25. dear,mam my character is named vinod he is very poor coming from a village to dance and get some money if he can get . he was child with only parent . He only had his father.
    Description :-
    He was of 23 years .
    He was of about 2.5 feet as hi didn’t had his legs.
    His wight is about 45 kg .
    He has curly hair style.
    His skin is blackish.
    He was a fast runner.

    Nature :-
    He was kind .
    He is very quiet.
    He is very attentive.
    He is very honest.

  26. Ma’am I would like to add more details of my female hero:
    She is a die hard fan of Sherlock Holmes and has all the volumes. The books inspire her and she uses some of his brilliant ideas to solve cases. She has a partner named Susan who helps her. She is sincere and a good college student and is a favourite of all professors. She’s slightly thin and has green sparkling eyes, straight silky hair. She likes to wear knee length dresses. Her name is Elina.

    • Sanskriti, now I feel I’m getting to know Elina! I’m simply dying to read about how this super cool sleuth (detective) solves her first case using Sherlock Holmes’ Method (Elementary, my dear Watson!)

  27. Dear mam,
    I have made a character of my imaginary :-
    It’s name is SUMAN.
    She is 18 years old.
    she is 6 feet tall.
    Her hairs are blackish-brown in colour.
    Parents died when a baby. Till age of 5 years lived in a orphanage.
    In age of 5years 6 months a couple adopted her.
    Thin and ovaled face
    she was cute, patient, responsible, dependable, intelligent and daring .
    She loved read fairy tales.
    She was loved by every one.

      • Dear mam,
        I wanted to add some more points which are :-
        Her hobbies are- (as I told first ) reading fairy tales , playing badminton , listing music.
        she has went to state level for playing badminton
        her pet name is DIKU.

  28. Respected Ma’am,
    Here is my description of the heroine I imagined :-
    Jennifer is a teenager, she is quite tall and she is 16 years old. She is thin and quite fair. She has silky, long, straight, dark brown hair. She has beautiful and very expressive brown coloured eyes. She has white shinning teeth. She likes to wear t-shirts that have shades of blue and purple. She has a natural aptitude for art. She is fairly good in studies and she has a love for dancing. Her prized possession are the ballet slippers her aunt gave her on her birthday.She is very friendly, kind and has a positive attitude towards everything. She never gives up and always keeps trying.

  29. Respected Ma’am here is the description of my heroine:
    She has a long blond hair,heart shaped face,huge blue eye,beautiful ,white in colour, wide mouth,adorable dimples,naughty but charming expression, honey blood hair, brilliant white teeth,stunning smile and pink lips.She’s average height.Eighteen years and her name is Alia.

  30. Respected Ma’am,
    This is the description of my hero[male]:
    The boy’s name was RAJESH who was always dressed properly and neatly. His height was about 6 feet and was a healthy boy who was 13 years old . He had good friends because he was a well-natured boy but poor who lived in the time of the wars of Maharana Pratap . He liked playing gilli-danda and was clever but not good in studies. His eyes were brown and chubby chicks. He also has a younger brother ,rakesh.
    His one hand was not working

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  32. Respected Ma’am here is the description of my hero (female):
    She is a college girl who is cute, sincere, graceful, intelligent and an all rounder. She likes to solve interesting cases and is a simple girl of average height. Unfortunately, she has hearing disability.

  33. Respected ma’am,
    I wrote the character of the story that I imagined.
    The man that I saw was neither too fair nor to black. But he was highly skilled. Not too long not too short, around 5 feet. Was named as a “challenge accepter” by people. He was near 30 years old. He never discriminated people and always provided help to each and every person whenever required. Always respected and thanked others. He had made a team of five fellows. The team was named”satya ka Saath.” Whenever a robbery takes place, he and his followers made plans to catch the thief. He was really very brave. Thus, he was highly respected by people.

    This is my story’s character.

    • Dear Sachi, Your character sounds very interesting and I’d like to know him better. You have also given a hint of the plot outline in the team of 5 called satya ka saath. I am eager to read your story.

      • Respected ma’am,
        Really very sorry for posting the villain of the story late.
        This is my villain:
        He is 25 years old.
        Has very horrible teeth and dirty face.
        Was always jealous of challenge accepter.
        Was ill literate.
        Always tried to make evil plans.( which were always unsuccessful.)
        Had a stealing habit.
        Was a good spy.
        He also had five members as his followers.
        Very rude and with a cruel behaviour.
        These are the things that I imagined in my story about villain.

      • Dear Sachi, Your villain has many repulsive characteristics. Please do not, however, confuse physical deformity (horrible teeth) with an evil nature. The two may not always go together. Two more queries – what is his NAME? Why have you described him in the past tense, even before the story has begun?

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